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Post by talon on Oct 6, 2010 0:09:05 GMT -5
Species: Gray Wolf Gender: Male *Sexuality: Straight Name: Talon Age: Roughly 3 or 4 in 'dog years'. Around 17-21 in maturity Birth Month: June Birth Place: Japan Pack and Rank: Alpha lowered to Omega, pack unknown
Height: Big wolf, around 3 feet. Weight: Close to 115, though well built instead of fat. Build: Well built, firm legs and strong muzzle. Eye Color: Dark orange, almost red. Hair/Fur/Feather Color(s): Fur is completely black. Fur Texture/Length: Thick fur in multiple coat layers, makes him look larger and stronger. Appears to be a constant winter coat. Accessories: Studded collar that was placed on him when he was tranquilized and tracked. Collar was meant to keep him tied up should he awake yet his escape from it was unsuccessful. Mostly hidden underneath his thick mane. *Over-all Description: Talon is a big wolf who likes to hunt, and the strength of his legs and chest show that. He has a thick coat, piercing dark orange eyes, a strong muzzle and ears that are always alert.
Over-All Personality: Talon is gentle despite his demonic appearance. He doesn't like those in a higher rank than he, but he follows instructions and pack rules. Since Talon had always been looked down upon because of his first pack fiasco and because of rumors that may or may not be true, he despises the higher ranking wolves... but won't hesitate to respect their rules or wishes. He is affectionate and sweet...until it's time to hunt. Personality Quirks Soft and well rounded. He's always kind to those around him. He's also very chivalrous. *Fears: Death. *Ambitions/Goals: To climb his way back up his ranks and become mated to his life partner. *Likes: Food. Starry summer nights, making dens, sharpening his claws and hunting skills. *Dislikes: Humans.
Mother: Ayame Father: Kiba Brother(s):Koto Sister(s): None *Other Family Members: None Friends: Unknown *Acquaintances: Unknown Enemies: Many Attraction(s): None Mate/Preferred Partner: None yet
History: Born to from a litter of stillbirths, Talon managed to live through the child birth and saw the world unlike his dead brothers and sisters. His mother was too weak to provide much nourishment and died only a few weeks after. Talon's 'grandmother', a surrogate, helped nurse him from a pup though he was weaned from milk much too early. Talon's father blamed his mate's death on Talon, assuming he took what little strength she had in the birthing. When he was still young, Talon fled the den of his family and managed to live on his own as a rogue. Meeting a new pack, they took him in and he quickly became the alpha. However, the power seemed to get to him and he was downgraded back to Omega before anything bad could happen. Talon now wanders again, a rogue to any pack, hoping to find a mate and start a pack of his own.
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Post by Candle on Oct 6, 2010 21:36:48 GMT -5
Hey there! Glad to see some new members coming in. ^^
The picture for now is fine, but I was wondering what program you used to make it, or what game it was a screen-shot from. Either way, I'm impressed xD
Only a few minor things need to be fixed before I can accept you.
- For one, 150 pounds is very, very heavy even for a wolf of his height. I'll need you to knock it down to a maximum of 115 pounds.
- I also need some more information on his personality- it seems very general and slightly cliche. Explain how he acts around authority and why he dislikes it so much (is he dominant or simply rebellious
- The final thing is that it is unlikely he would have survived if his mother died before he was weaned unless there was a nanny in the pack (who's teats are constantly lactating for such an occasion). And we need to know a little bit how/why he lowered from an alpha to an omega.
After that, I'll be glad to put my crappily made accepted sticker. :3
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Post by talon on Oct 7, 2010 1:07:31 GMT -5
I'll fix the information ASAP. I took the screenshot from Zoo Tycoon 2, using a mod called Fenris. My character is actually a werewolf and I wanted to use a more natural wolf for once so I'll fix the information to fit that. Thanks for the advice.
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Post by Candle on Oct 7, 2010 16:21:52 GMT -5
Please practice not making run-on sentences and make sure to run your posts through a grammar checker until you get the hang of things. Otherwise, nice job. Feel free to make a new thread or join one already open! ^^
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